Documentary - The Edit

Whilst I had input in the edit, these were only on days where we were in University, Gavin and George have been doing a great job with the edit so far and as they all live in close proximity together it works better than having me travel 30 minutes each way.

When showing Helen the rough cut she gave the following pointers =
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• More atmos in the beginning. The sound is a bit off. She also felt that the images shown in the beginning don't work to the voice over that we’re having. 
• Cut out some of the pre-title sequences. She pointed out that we have at least 3 starting points in the beginning so we need to find out which one is the best one. 
• Slow down the part at Kamran’s house. Try to have him speak more laid-back. We won’t be able to redo the V.O since Kamran is on vacation, but we can see if we can cut some of the audio up to make a bit more spacing, creating some room to breathe. 
• At the Memorial: Go straight to the PTC in the beginning. Cut the establishing shots. With the VOX pops we should start with the couple, not the Asian guy.  
• Helen also didn’t like some of the commentary and suggested us to get a voice over artist for the commentary and have our presenter only talking at the PTC’s. We’ve talked about that as a group and we all disagree as we want to keep the commentary as it is and work around it to make it work instead of getting another person to do it. 
• Work on the way we are introducing Shahak. 
• There’s some lack in signposting in the documentary which makes it easy for the audience to get confused/lost. 
• Not having an as linear structure as we’re still having. 
• Make the interviews less sync heavy. Show cuts that underline what they’re talking about. 
• Have the Museum guy coming in earlier. We’ve talked about this but can’t find a spot where he fits better/ someone else that fits to be at the end. " - From Trines Notes

When showing Zoe our rough cut she suggested to make the documentary less linear, as we had been trying to make the doc a journey for Kamran this changed our plans considerably, however that happens in the industry, She also suggested having the VOX pops throughout the edit rather than in just one place and recommended that we re-record Kamrans VO to make it sound better.

More work was done to the edit and we put forward the fine cut, Zoe gave us some feedback which was mostly entered around leading up shots.

She wants the title sequence to have more of the inappropriate selfies

Have a line to remind the viewer what the documentary is about after the title

Have more Holocaust Memorial shots before moving on to David as it allows the audience time to digest what they have seen at the moment they are moving from place to place rather rapidly

Maybe split up the interview with David so there is a part at the end

She wants the timeline changed a bit so the holocaust survivors are shown after the memorial, then Christoph, then Kamran walking through Berlin and the have David cap of the end of the Documentary